When you make a list in any kind of writing, whether it is a resume, an essay, or an article to be published, there are a few specific rules to follow. Begin a list with a statement introducing the list. The statement ends with a colon. Here are some examples. I have extensive editing skills: [...]
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The history of the car
A reader submitted the following long chunk of text for the free editing service which is limited to 300 words. The first paragraph only has been edited. Essay Question: The Automobile Starting from the 1700′s, creative thinkers began to wonder about ways to travel to places without using horses which would tire. All types of motors were tested by the [...]
What is the purpose of life?
A reader submitted 300 words for free editing. Suggested changes are below in red. The first point is that you have used the pronoun “they” for an unspecified person. I know this avoids the gender question of he or she, but to a grammatical purist it’s wrong because “they” is for a plural subject. Some people would insist [...]
A Frankenstein Essay – What drove Mary Shelley to it?
A reader sent in multiple paragraphs, but the free service offer is for one paragraph only. Here is the edited version of the first two paragraphs because the first paragraph was very short. Mary Shelly is a very influential author, but there a lot more to her writing, which was deeply affected by all her personal [...]
Preparing for the Iron Man (or Woman)
Stephanie sent this paragraph for free edits: The exercises and training that I would do for the “Iron Man” contest in Hawaii is really simple. I would want to start doing this plan that you are about to read months before the “Iron Man” contest. First thing in the morning, I would wake up and [...]
Introduction to an historical essay
A reader sends this paragraph for comments: Over the many thousands of years, the events of History have had similar roots; however the actions made had differences. The Progressive Era, New Deal and Great Society are comparable to a degree. These social reform movements are similar in the depth of their building blocks, or origins [...]
Animal Farm: Power Corrupts
A reader submitted the paragraph: Many people are reluctant to stand up to authority because of the power they control within their hands. Power can be purely defined as “the possession of control or command over others.” Numerous novels have expressed the impact that power has had on humans, but there’s one that illustrates the [...]
Men, women and conflict
Here’s a nice little paragraph: Also psychologically different, men and women typically respond in differ ways to emotion. While men tend to react violently, women react by communicating in a friendly way because women are believed to naturally be more in tuned to others emotions and feelings than men. According to Sigmund Freud, “women show [...]
Eudora Welty: A wellworn path
Fernando sent this “grammar” question: In Eudora Welty’s short story, “A Worn Path” Phoenix Jackson represents an ageing truth. Phoenix grows up living in slavery or Civil War era. She dealt with slavery her whole life, even now free she has to endure the 1940′s segregated south. Slavery is an imbedded thought everywhere she goes. [...]
Mixed Martial Arts – Fists vs Grammar
Diego sent this paragraph: Once I was a MMA fighter, MMA means mixed martial arts. When I was 9 years old I saw my first fight between two friends, since that fight I start like fighting, and had the pleasured to beat up the fist boy that said something to me. When I reached the [...]