A reader sent in multiple paragraphs, but the free service offer is for one paragraph only. Here is the edited version of the first two paragraphs because the first paragraph was very short.
Mary Shelly is a very influential author, but there a lot more to her writing, which was deeply affected by all her personal issues. This is reflected in her novel Frankenstein. You can see her pain all through the book. Mary Shelly was inspired by her parents, her era, and mainly her dead children.
Editor’s notes: this is a good introduction, it tells us what is to come. I deleted some repetitive bits and joined the first two sentence to make one smoother sentence.
Mary Shelly was influenced by her parents to be a writer and this influence shaped her career. Mary’s father, Mr. William Godwin, was a famous philosopher and anarchist. Her mother, Mary Wollstonecraft, an early feminist, was writer of the Vindication of the Rights of Women. Her mother and father both change their era greatly. Mary Shelly never met her mother; she died of birth complications 10 days after she gave birth to Mary due to puerial fever. Mary’s father re-married to Mary Jane Clairmont. Mary Shelly did not like her. According to Concise Dictionary of British Literary Biography, she “construed Mrs. Godwin as the opposite of everything that she had learn to worship in her own dead mother.” Because Mary Shelly’s father was a very famous philosopher, from an early age Mary was surrounded by famous writers, philosophers and poets. (About.com) This was an influence that pushed her to be a very successful author.
Editor’s notes: Sentence 1: the use of “somewhat” makes the sentence weak. In your essay you should be focusing on things that did or didn’t happen, but don’t bother with weak words like “somewhat.” I set off “Mr. William Godwin” in commas because that makes it a restrictive clause. A restrictive clause provides an explanation for something. Then I added a verb, “was,” to make the sentence complete. In the next sentence, you use the verb “was” which makes it a correct sentence, but I added commas around the name as before. I also took the parenthetical expression and moved it into the sentence as a restrictive clause. You used curly brackets (perhaps it was a computer error and the curly brackets were put in by the email program) but we don’t normally use those in writing. Additionally, I changed the reference slightly from “the first known feminist” to “an early feminist” because expressions like ”the first” and ”best” are hard to prove. I think it’s quite likely someone could come up with an earlier woman who could be considered a feminist. Then there’s a bunch of stuff that looks like you made some editing mistakes. We didn’t need to repeat the reference to the name of Mary’s father, so I tightened things up here to get to the important point that the visitors to the home that influenced Mary. I also changed the reference from About.com to one that is in the text, just because it shows another way to make a reference in APA style. I took the last sentence of this paragraph and moved it to the beginning of the next paragraph because it seems more apropriate as an introductory sentence.
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